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January 13, 2014 / catherinebwrites

The first time I saw…

This was written for this week’s Trifecta Writing Challenge.
 http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/
  They want 38 words, one syllable each including the following snippet: “The first time I saw. . .
 

Sleeping Baby In His Mother’s Arms,    www.123rf.com – 1203 × 798 – 

The first time I saw him in Mum’s arms his face was red.

“This is Joe.” she said.

“But he’s a boy!  I told you, I want a girl!”

“You take what God gives.”

“I don’t like God.” 

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  1. joetwo / Jan 13 2014 4:43 pm

    That is a good one. Nicely done Catherine.

  2. catherinebwrites / Jan 13 2014 5:07 pm

    Thanks Joe. Liked yours too.

  3. Tara R. / Jan 13 2014 5:17 pm

    This made me laugh, and wonder if my brother had the same reaction when I was born… having wanted a brother.

  4. Quickstepp / Jan 13 2014 5:44 pm

    Ha! Joe has a long life of forced Barbie time ahead of him.

    • catherinebwrites / Jan 13 2014 6:09 pm

      No… with 3 brothers and no sisters I learned to love toy cars!

      • Quickstepp / Jan 13 2014 6:12 pm

        Ha! We had one of each in my family. Equal parts Barbies and cars.

  5. humanTriumphant / Jan 13 2014 6:53 pm

    thanks for the grin

  6. Eleenie / Jan 13 2014 7:19 pm

    Great!

  7. El Guapo / Jan 13 2014 9:33 pm

    Great punchline!

  8. C.C. / Jan 14 2014 3:49 am

    Ha ha, this sounds like a scene from my house 🙂

  9. Christine / Jan 14 2014 6:04 am

    Hahaha! That is precious. 🙂 Fabulous little story!

  10. Lala Rukh / Jan 14 2014 12:30 pm

    That’s sad 😦 For Joe too ! Nicely done 🙂

  11. Cobbie's World / Jan 15 2014 12:27 am

    Kids can say the worst things, at times but, I’m willing to bet that Joe was well-loved and hugged and held…..eventually! 🙂 When we took our three year old to see her newborn sister, we had a trophy waiting for her that declared that she was the “Best Big Sister”. Since it was her first real trophy, she was too distracted by that to fret over the little rival for our affection, who lay snoozing in her little crib. The games parents play! 🙂

    • catherinebwrites / Jan 15 2014 12:06 pm

      Yeah It’s why I make sure to have a big brother/big sister gift when a new baby arrives.

  12. lovethebadguy / Jan 15 2014 8:49 am

    Haha! I got a bit of a giggle from this. Nicely written. 🙂

  13. OldDogNewTits / Jan 15 2014 1:55 pm

    “You get what you get … and you don’t have a fit!”

    That’s what they taught my daughter in kindergarten. We try to subscribe to this little expression whenever necessary. But it works better if you say it like a country bumpkin (“git”) so it all rhymes. 🙂

    Great job, Catherine.

    • catherinebwrites / Jan 15 2014 3:08 pm

      Depends on which country your bumpkin lives in! Here, (Dublin Ireland) it would be “Ye ge whacha ge!”

  14. Sun / Jan 15 2014 2:58 pm

    sometimes it is hard with new arrivals…i enjoyed your story. ☺

  15. dani / Jan 15 2014 5:53 pm

    too cute!!!

  16. Kylie / Jan 16 2014 7:28 am

    Ha! That’s what my daughter said. Except for the god part 🙂

    • catherinebwrites / Jan 16 2014 10:29 am

      And you know something… despite the fact that i got on well with my brothers I STILL want a sister!

  17. Rexie / Jan 16 2014 11:24 pm

    Amazing! Just how poetry needs to be.

  18. Rexie / Jan 16 2014 11:25 pm

    And yet not many can capture such a poetic effect in prose. Well done!

    • catherinebwrites / Jan 17 2014 12:42 pm

      I may just have to curl up in a ball and blush! Thank you for your kind words.

  19. Michael56j / Jan 17 2014 9:45 am

    Ah yes. The vagaries of the birthing. Great post.

  20. Draug419 / Jan 19 2014 1:54 pm

    Gotta love kids’ spunk.

  21. trifectawriting / Jan 19 2014 10:03 pm

    I hear you, kid. Sometimes those decisions are hard to understand.

  22. Ivy (Mommy Dourest) / Jan 20 2014 12:57 pm

    This is adorable and so realistic. Very cute piece!

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